byChrisWhite – 2024
The story was written in response to a flash-fiction challenge called – Family Secrets. A 500 words or less challenge to write a story using the challenge-phrase (Family Secrets) somewhere within the story.
IT STARTED WITH A MISSISSIPPI BIRTH CERTIFICATE, folded and yellowing in a lacquered box beneath the cupboard. A name he didn’t recognize. A date that placed the child years before his own arrival. His mother’s name in tight, deliberate print. His father’s, absent.
Jonah sat on the linoleum, the air laced with the strong scents of cat urine and Chlorox. The pipes above him dripped in rhythm with Mick Fleetwood’s steady beat as The Chain played in the background. He read it again. And again.
At dinner, he turned his fork over in his hand. His mother set down a dish of mashed potatoes doused in a pool of butter.
“Who’s Matthew?” he asked.
The room stilled. His mother’s face, so familiar in its weathered quiet, didn’t shift. His father cleared his throat, sipped his beer. Jonah’s sister, ten years old and all her big-eyed curiosity, turned her head between ‘em like a tennis match.
His mother sat. “Where’d you hear that name?”
He told her. The wooden box. From the browned and brittle paperwork, like dead leaves or something.
She exhaled, long and thin, pressing her fingers together. His father got up, walked to the sink, and stared into the empty basin.
“I had me a brother?” Jonah asked.
His mother pressed her lips together, then nodded.
“Why didn’t you tell me?”
“You never asked,” his father said.
Jonah felt something inside break. “That’s dumb. I didn’t ask because I didn’t know he existed.”
His father wiped his hands on a dish towel. His mother, ever careful, folded hers in her lap.
“He died Jonah,” she said. “A long while back.”
“How?”
His mother’s mouth opened, but his father spoke first. “He drowned… The creek.”
His stomach tightened. He had lived in the same house his whole life. Waded through the creek out back every summer since he was little, felt the water swirl against his legs, let his sister ride his back ‘cross the deeper parts.
Never once was Jonah told to be careful.
Never once been warned by his parents.
Searching for the right words, Jonah’s mother reached across the table, grasping at his hand.
“It was an accident.”
His father turned, the muscles in his jaw working.
“I was supposed to be lookin’ after him.”
Jonah looked up.
Jonah’s suddenly fragile mother’s fingers twitched against his own. “I wasn’t but twelve,” his father said in a whispered breath. “I told him,” his father cried, “Stay close to the bank.”
Quiet permeated the room like water in a sinking ship. His father wiped his dampened eyes, exhaled hard.
His mother sat up straight. “Jonah,” she sighed. “Now ya’ know.”
Nothing like the explanation he wanted. Not an apology. Just the truth, spoken out loud for the first time in decades.
Maybe ever.
Jonah swallowed; mouth dry as cotton. He thought of the creek, how the ground there sometimes worked loose underfoot, how he had never known what family secrets lay beneath its surface.
He thought of his father, twelve years old, standing on the bank, looking for a shape beneath the water.
He pushed his chair back. “I’m going for a walk.”
No one stopped him.



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This rings true because every family has a secret, big or small.
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Thank you Diana.
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Here, as usual, you give us a twist. So nice to see a stolid mother and an emotional father. Hopefully, decoding the family secret brought closure and some kind of relief to these parents and a life lesson to their son.
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Yes, you picked up on that little nuance. Thank you for reading and sharing your thoughts Warren.
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WOW
So I’m eager to know: when will your Southern Gothic novel be ready?
Which makes me think, are you familiar with Midnight In the Garden of Good and Evil? If I remember correctly, it was based on true events and characters…and made into a movie as well.
Best regards, Rene
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Rene,
Yes. I love that book. And Savannah, one of my favorite places to visit, has always felt like its living echo. The streets and squares there carry the same slow-breathed atmosphere, the same bruised grace, the same sense that the past is still present, still walking beside you.
Last week my editor sent the final pass of my manuscript. She tells me I should have the fully typeset, polished copy by this coming Friday. After that, it’s just the cover flaps, a handful of small design choices inside, and the legal marks that make it mine. Then the press.
I’ll share information about it soon, here and across my social media, asking for a few pre-orders. It’s my first work of fiction, and I’ve taken care to polish it with the kind of effort that will cost more than it will ever earn. Hoping to set a standard, to establish myself.
Your encouragement has meant more than you know.
Chris
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Hi Chris, trust me–my interest is 100% sincere. I remember my mom reading the book we mentioned, after I recommended it to her–I don’t think she ate a full meal till she’d read the ending, totally absorbed, as I was. She was a southern gal, would have been eager for your book too. I certainly wish you great success and prosperity.
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Thanks again Rene. I appreciate the encouragement more than you might imagine.
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I am left feeling the secret is still not told. The father was 12- and not on the birth certificate- but it was his fault Matthew drown? I feel as though something way more sinister was afoot! Brilliant writing.
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Thank you, yeah, it’s an odd age I know, but I felt by reducing the fathers age to an inappropriate one, it really amped up the heaviness in an unorthodox and unexpected way. Sometimes it’s the little things.
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What a lovely little story well told. Meadowhead Bard.
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Thank you very much!
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